May 14, 2010 12:06
14 yrs ago
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Italian term

la sintesi delle lacrime

Italian to English Art/Literary Cinema, Film, TV, Drama film
the synthesis of tears...hmmmmm. thanks alot in advance.

Juan: When, mum?

Estrella: In a few years when you're older!

Juan: Ok, mum........


ENGLISH:
A close up of Estrella whose eyes are sparkling, no doubt about to shed a tear. (It's the synthesis of tears of all the mums like Estrella, living at the bottom rungs of society and of mothers of the impoverished...)

ITALIAN:
Juan: quando mamma ?
Estrella: fra qualche anno quando sarai più grande!
Juan: va bene mamma...

primissimo piano di Estrella alla quale le luccicano gli occhi... forse le scende una lacrima.. (è la sintesi delle lacrime di tutte le madri come Estrella, ultima nella vita e madre di ultimi...
Proposed translations (English)
4 +2 hers are the tears of every
3 it's a telling symbol of mothers

Discussion

BdiL May 14, 2010:
Actually "alla quale le luccicano gli occhi": in this line "le" = "alla quale" therefore "alla quale alla quale luccicano gli occhi"? Poor Italian, but not your fault! At best a colloquialism acceptable in speaking. I would write "alla quale luccicano gli occhi" (even in a script).
And further on, watch out: "...and of mothers of the impoverished" is not the equivalent of "...[e madri come Estrella, ultima nella vita] e madre di ultimi...". Estrella is the mother of (her) impoverished (=sitting at the bottom step of social scale) children. She is the touchstone for all mothers of..., but that I wouldn't translate as "and of mothers of the impoverished". Beside that, finding the right way to render the poetic spirit and emphasis of Italian is your job, specially if this shall be a voiceover. Should it be just a descript, then it's less important.
Maurizio

Proposed translations

+2
8 mins
Selected

hers are the tears of every

One possible way of saying this
Peer comment(s):

agree BdiL : ...mum etc., I suppose. Good going! Maurizio
2 hrs
agree nimopaz
1 day 50 mins
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3 KudoZ points awarded for this answer. Comment: "in the end I wrote whose eyes are shining, perhaps with unshed tears (representing all the unshed tears of mothers like Estrella, humblest in life, and mother of the humblest…) "
21 hrs

it's a telling symbol of mothers

A little readaptation...
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